[x]

deviantART

 


Trapped in the darkness I am swallowed,
Taken to this place so dreadfully hollow.
Now I wait by the gate and never look back,
I stand in the gloom, all dressed in black.

When the hearse departed the palls,
I hid between it and the jagged walls,
Making my escape from human eyes,
Stood around my grave not one cries.

Their hate for me permeates each pore,
They threw me aside, a man no more.
So my bloody vengeance I will take,
Just past nightfall, after my wake.

I lurk outside, within the outhouse,
Pondering on my disowned spouse.
The darkness pales, a moon is seen,
Bathed in ashen light I plan the scene.

A shiver shoots from within my spine,
I curse and crawl, and let out a whine.
A painful itch beneath my skin, I claw,
Wincing as I tear my flesh with a paw.

Padding across the forecourt, I see,
The horrible stench of the bourgeoisie.
Slinking through the kitchen door,
I hear their laughter more and more.

I see folk cavorting for cheap thrills,
Wine spills into my sensitive nostrils,
And so I decide that now is the time,
To take revenge for their spiteful crime.

Blood fills my vision as I tear them down,
Ignoring every shriek and every sound.
I roar through each and every mortal,
Crushing them before they cross the portal.
©2004-2009 ~kickmeiamadog
Details
Submitted: October 5, 2004
File Size: 1.5 KB
Image Size: 0 bytes
Resolution: 0×0
Comments: 30
Favourites & Collections: 7 [who?]

Views
Total: 212
Today: 0

Downloads
Total: 14
Today: 0

Thumb

Author's Comments

LAugh at the forced rhyme i say, laugh!
[x]

Devious Comments

love 0 0 joy 0 0 wow 0 0 mad 0 0 sad 0 0 fear 0 0 neutral 0 0

Comments


I stand in the gloom, all dressed in black..... Hmmmm, you know the Cruxshadows???

How can one lurk outside when one is in an outhouse??? Hmmmmmmmm

Thrills and nostrils... NOW THAT'S TALENT!!!

Bravo, chummers.... *grin*

--
Wenn du lange in einen Abgrund hineinsiehst, sieht der Abgrund auch in dich hinein

-Nietzsche
Heh, i've heard of them but only heard one or two tracks, apparently their lyrics are awful...
You can lurk wherever you like, there's no rule against it....

--
Well all i can say is if my heart was quiet i would feel empty, the fact it still beats out a sadness means i still have a heart to care. - Me 24/05/04

I am an adopter at :iconwriters:
Their lyrics are poetry... Better than a lot of stuff on DA..... I am quite partial to them... I think you would like them too... Hmmm, whoever said that to you can kiss my rosey white American arse... *grin*

Anyway, I really did like the piece, bro... It was pretty inventive, and some of those rhymes would have been hard to come up with...

--
Wenn du lange in einen Abgrund hineinsiehst, sieht der Abgrund auch in dich hinein

-Nietzsche
Really? i thought they seemed obvious, glad ya enjoyed it, i called it forced because the rhyme seemed so forced to me....

--
Well all i can say is if my heart was quiet i would feel empty, the fact it still beats out a sadness means i still have a heart to care. - Me 24/05/04

I am an adopter at :iconwriters:
heehee cute=P
great work, the way you found rhymes is genius

--
Mixed Into One:heart:

Aymie- ~angelsdiary
Sarah- *The-Shadowed-Angel
:giggle: first let me say this: its wonderful to read a poem thats not about suicide! :hug:
he is dead though, or atleast undead, but still, a werewolves revenge is a cathy theme. ^^ and the rhymes? forced? maybe? maybe not. it sounded cool to me! ^v-v^
im no poet, and i dont know poems, but i know what i like when i see it. :thumbsup:
thats why im faving this! ^^ (its kinda funny too)

--
WYYRD!: [link]
Thankies :D
*takes a bow*

--
Well all i can say is if my heart was quiet i would feel empty, the fact it still beats out a sadness means i still have a heart to care. - Me 24/05/04

I am an adopter at :iconwriters:
Thankyou my friend.
Well to say i didnt really like this one people sure seem to have enjoyed it, i almost didnt post it....

--
Well all i can say is if my heart was quiet i would feel empty, the fact it still beats out a sadness means i still have a heart to care. - Me 24/05/04

I am an adopter at :iconwriters:
just proves that gut-feelings are not always correct. :shrug:

--
WYYRD!: [link]

Site Map