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A Discombobulated Haiku by ~kickmeiamadog:iconkickmeiamadog:

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Black, a landscape of darkness,
Lace spinning a web, interspersed with pink.
Colours evolve then disappear.
©2005-2009 ~kickmeiamadog
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Author's Comments

A present for my friend helen * miss-antiworld
Well the idea was to do something like a haiku, but longer, so i aimed for 7,10,7, but it ended up as 7,10,8...
Hence it is A Discombobulated Haiku for Helen

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~miss-antiworld Feb 7, 2005, 3:30:22 PM
<3 it's so cool!

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"If you don't know where you are going, all roads lead there."
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~kickmeiamadog Feb 7, 2005, 3:34:31 PM
I'm very glad you like it :D
Thanks for the fave :P

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Well all i can say is if my heart was quiet i would feel empty, the fact it still beats out a sadness means i still have a heart to care. - Me 24/05/04

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~MajesticRaro Feb 7, 2005, 3:34:44 PM
I agree!!
Lovliest 3-line poem I've ever read!
;) lol
It's great, really.

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The thin overlay of reason gives way to reverie, identity is submerged by oceanic feelings of unity, and seeing loses the conventional meanings imposed upon the object seen. Color and pattern exist for themselves.
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=Offering Feb 7, 2005, 3:37:02 PM
i think it is great
love how you've used the colours
to symbolize dark

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.. L'enfer c'est les autres ..
Jean-Paul Sartre
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~kickmeiamadog Feb 7, 2005, 3:55:48 PM
Lol, great comment :P

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Well all i can say is if my heart was quiet i would feel empty, the fact it still beats out a sadness means i still have a heart to care. - Me 24/05/04

I am an adopter at :iconwriters:
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~kickmeiamadog Feb 8, 2005, 12:35:49 AM
Awk, why thankyou :P

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Well all i can say is if my heart was quiet i would feel empty, the fact it still beats out a sadness means i still have a heart to care. - Me 24/05/04

I am an adopter at :iconwriters:
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!Ook Feb 8, 2005, 2:52:03 AM
I love it. That's fun to write haiku, don't you think ?
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~kickmeiamadog Feb 8, 2005, 3:59:02 AM
Hehe, yeah they are fun, so simple yet succinct.

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Well all i can say is if my heart was quiet i would feel empty, the fact it still beats out a sadness means i still have a heart to care. - Me 24/05/04

I am an adopter at :iconwriters:
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